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Have you ever seen the moon
when the sun was in the sky?
Isn't it an odd picture?
Isn't it a strange surprise?
When the day and night meet
over a sea of blue,
it's funny how these things
make me think of you.

The formula decrees
that one plus one is two.
We're living in a world
cast in absolutes.
But when the mold is broken
and the sun and moon both shine,
do we look to the supernatural?
Is it the monster in the sky?

So what, then, defines reality?
Where is drawn the line?
to seperate our night and day,
to seperate the time,
to seperate the you's and me's
from all the her's and him's,
to write the text defining what
we all feel within.


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The following comments are for "Absolutes"
by dhazelrig

absolutes
Have you ever heard of a band called Stavesacre? They have an album called Absolutes. You might like it.

I didn't like the line, "Where is drawn the line?", but if I'm correct in assuming the poem is a love poem, you do a very good job of keeping it from being overly cliche or sappy.

( Posted by: mark [Member] On: February 5, 2002 )

So simply sweet and reflective
Such a simply sweet and reflective piece, on how to define the world around us, the world within us, and the world we share between ourselves and an or many others.

I very much like this piece, and I disagree with the previous comment, about not liking the line "Where is drawn the line?" as it flows nicely with the piece keeping the same rhetorical and reflective tone.

Thank you for sharing :)

( Posted by: De`esse [Member] On: February 22, 2002 )

Cmment by a nincompoop
"We're living in a world
cast in absolutes."
Really a grave understaning expressed with originality.But do you want to challange the ongoing "creativity"?
It apparently seems so.A bit hyperbolic end has given the piece a novelty.
I liked it, and it's a nice work to be appreciated.

( Posted by: Myth [Member] On: July 3, 2004 )





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