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you've been gone-
i'd given up hope
thought you'd
hopped a train to neverland
i expected
a post card
but there you stood
w/ your unruly mop of hair-
gangly in your
you want a bath-
all i need is a smile
the hand you weave into mine is
you smell of
sweat &
instead of a kiss i get
"let me take a bath"
i begin to protest
a joint appears in your other hand
"join me"
and you give me
my smile.


This is not my work, I get no credit.
However, I might mention that, all conciet aside,
this is a really great poem. It almost brought a tear to my eye, reminding me of a time I spent with someone special.
This is my first submission.

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by xinerama

The low down
The author is: Terje StÝback
The title is: You give me my smile

I use to write poetry. Maybe when I get into my writing intensive courses in the fall I will post some work.

( Posted by: xinerama [Member] On: April 21, 2004 )

Correction wrt. credit.
I would like to point out that I am not the author of this poem. The final word of the text linked to the actual author, but I admit that it should have been a bit more pronounced.

The author is Chris Treadway, and her work can be found at

( Posted by: fall [Member] On: May 15, 2006 )

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