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Film was scary with lows and highs
Had demons all two hours long
Many times I covered my eyes
Until the end credits and song

Wish now I hadnít sneaked in
Shaking all on my own
Nobody with me to have a grin
When all the monsters were blown

Outside thereís a real cold snap
I breathe mist into my hands
Onto my head goes the warm cap
And I walk towards the bus stands

Demons, creatures and creepy things
Scowl en route, in my head
And that one that strangely sings
Iím so glad that he was shot dead

A bus is due in ten or so
My, my how time soon flies
Iíll just call in here, to go
And get myself some nice fries

How weird, itís empty tonight
Just me and pimply Jim
His moodís not such a cheery sight
Mind you, who can blame him

He says theyíll be a minute or three
Ok, thatís fine, so Iíll wait
But who is tapping behind me?
Outside things donít look too straight

Thereís scratching and scraping on the glass
The shadows they dance and click
Whoís there, is that my mate Chas
Playing a funny trick?

I edge myself slowly outside
Slicing through the thick fog
Those shadows now swirl and glide
That shape, is that a big dog?

Hmm, what happens next to me
Is darn more scary than Boo
Afraid youíll have to wait patiently
For the next one: Adventure two

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