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It burns
But it's an icy burn

Like a cool winter day

Sitting alone in the snow
Peaceful and silent
T r a n q u i l

Yet the feeling of guilt peirces my stomach
I'm not supposed to be here
It's too peaceful to be unsuspicious

Suddenly, the snow turns to flames
and the smoke consumes me

I'm choking
Gasping for another chance to breathe

Squeezing my eyes shut tight
Telling myself none of this is real
I push my way through the smoke
and open my eyes

The smoke is gone and I can breathe again

But the sting of the burns left behind
reminds me of the hurt I felt before

Copyright 2004 Jennifer Bellew

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