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It's here at last!It has arrived.
"Winter" again we have survived.
Robins scurry in hungers quest.
Hunting fragments for their nest.

It's here at last!winter has retired.
Morning sunshine seems much brighter.
Fragrant freshness in the air.
Perennial flower buds everywhere.

It's here at last!cold weather abated.
New green grass we've long awaited.
Spring has sprung,prepare the way.
For flowers bursting forth in May.


Lorriane 4/17/04

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Lorraine


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The following comments are for "Spring"
by Lorraine

Spring
Claire,Thank you so much for your comment.I sincerely appreciate your input.I did'nt feel as though That line was forced when I wrote it,but I do feel the way you have it sounds alot better.

Being such a novice at this,I feel I have so much to learn and I'm eagerly looking forward to the learning process.I know I need to work on my punctuation.I feel this will come in time.
....................Thank you once again,My best , Lorraine

( Posted by: Lorraine [Member] On: April 19, 2004 )





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