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Angels were artists
Trees were brushes
Flowers were colors
Sky was canvas
My Girl….


A perfect woman
Crafted nobly by the nature

Her Body
Like…
An Idol of Aphrodite
Made by the almighty
My Girl….


A perfect woman

Her Skin
Like…
Velvety fabrics
With a moonbeam touch
My Girl….


A perfect woman

Her hairs
Like…
Dark black clouds
Floating in the sky
My Girl….


A perfect woman

Her lips
Like…
Red rose petals
Jelling together
My Girl….


A perfect woman

Her Clothes
Like…
A creeper takes hold
On a stem
My Girl….


A perfect woman

Her laughter
Like…
Hundreds of songbirds
Singing together
My Girl….


A perfect woman

Her Walk
Like…
A female serpent moving slowly
In the sand
My Girl….


A perfect woman

Angels were artists
Trees were brushes
Flowers were colors
Sky was canvas
My Girl….


A perfect woman
Crafted nobly by the nature



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The following comments are for "My Girl"
by paddy

My Girl
Paddy, I agree with Claire that you blow us away with you first stanza. I really enjoyed this piece.

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: April 21, 2004 )





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