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Come away with me.
I am the one who'll set you free.

Let me lull you with my song
and give you the dreams that you long.

Feel my breath against your skin,
release your grip and a new life begin.

I can take you to another place,
where you can play and dance with grace.

I want to show you all there is to see.
Just let go, and come with me.

Trust in me and I'll take you higher,
and give you the world that you desire.

And when our journey comes to its end,
I'll lay you down where the river bends.

On the current you'll drift away.
While regretably I must stay.

The gentle whisper of an autumn breeze,
speaking to the clinging leaves.


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The following comments are for "Sweet Nothings"
by Reba

Very Beautiful Poem
Rebal
I enjoyed this a lot. My favorite line is

*Trust in me and I'll take you higher,
*And give you the world desire,

Reminds me of a scripture in the Bible. Thanks for this.

Blessings upon you,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: April 16, 2004 )

Jeannie, 'n Claire
why thank ya ladies :)...Jeannie, thank you for your comment, I'm glad you liked it, and even more glad that you could take something from it...Claire, your a sweetheart, ya make me blush ;)...and I agree with your suggestion, it sounds much smoother the way you put it...thanks again to both of you for your kind words...
Reba

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: April 23, 2004 )

Alluring
I like the way it tempts and teases,
and the end where it is gentle in taking its leave.

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: May 18, 2004 )





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