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The sins of my father,it covers me.
I am blinded as a vail.
The cries of my mother,do not comfort
me as My hands reach out from hell.

The souls unraptured,on their tongue,
as they confess on judgement day,
the constant here after of punishement,
for hardships children dismay.

Let not the shoulders,of a truism be held,
for as the rising sun,least not a soldier who
is in this war,understand what they have done.

Call out they say ,for the hour is neigh,
that we should pass this chance,
for here in the heart of our own lies,
was our only advance.

The horse,it has crossed over,
as it straddles the ominous sea.
Have they opened,the worms of fulsome
possiblity,for which they can't break free.

LORD have mercy,fathers and mothers.
This is our responsablity.
Mother against daughter,son against son,
father's who are gone, The kids who carry

The red rage of disappointment.
The horse of color,the children ride upon.
Is this what we want them to remember,
when we're dead and gone.


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The following comments are for "The horse of color"
by CoCo

Again, another great poem that I enjoyed reading. Also, I liked the way you used the word "Neigh" which means crying out. very good. God is speaking through you.


( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: April 14, 2004 )

Well its been home spun lesson for sure,with my own son, and it has certainly taught me well..I just hope other parents can see, that we all need guidence by God, if we are to do what is the best...

( Posted by: CoCo [Member] On: April 14, 2004 )

The Horse of Color
Oh goodness i another good honey. YOu ought do an book i am serious. you could do an paperback on printship or printmaster to start. and sell it on or through

( Posted by: heart and soul [Member] On: April 14, 2004 )

heart and soul
I appreciate your kindness,,,I hope by my writing other parents realize its not to late,,they can make the future change with God's hand,,not their Might but the Lord,,I have made so many mistakes in my life all I can do now is hopeful warn others. as the Holy Spirit guides my trembling hand.

( Posted by: CoCo [Member] On: April 15, 2004 )

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