The following comments are for "Laziness" by Spudley
The Witty Potato
I really like this, Spud.
I also enjoyed that little thing Pen always likes to do with haiku -- flipping the first and third lines, so that yours reads:
Laziness loves irony,
Only creates more:
Striving to avoid hard work.
Not quite the same, but it's a funny/ironic read both ways. Kudos.
Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: April 11, 2004
This is great. I enjoyed the read. I would love to see more Haiku by you.
Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: April 12, 2004
Thanks all :)
Jess - yes it was. That last line was the hook that got me writing. I wanted that to be the last line, so I fitted the rest around it.
I was going to write something longer, but there was really only the one thing to say, so I fitted the form to it as best I could. (and besides... I was feeling lazy ;-))
Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: April 12, 2004
1st Haiku I have ever really enjoyed!
I really enjoyed this. Every month I write some saying, quote, or thought on my calendar and read it everyday. I will be writing this one for the month of May. I have never been a fan of Haiku's, but I really loved this!