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"I have found the imbecile!!! He is in the closet," said Cornell Omrick of Haskerville. Cornell Omrick was a tall, infallible person. and his assitant Sir Bob Webster of Fagetoville. Sir Bob was a rather infirm person. he was also insensate. You could put Bob under the word inscrutable. But that's enough about me and Bob.
"Give me the lock pick, Sir Bob!!!"
"I got the lock pick, Cornell!!!"
"Give me the lock pick, Sir Bob."
"I gave you the lock pick, Cornell."
"Thank you, Sir Bob."
"Your welcome, Cornell."
Cornell looked at the door and could tell that the door was impervious. So Cornell took the lock pick and attempted to pick it. Cornell picked the lock for seconds, minutes, hours, days, and months. Then finally after 6 months, 15 days, 45 minutes, and 32 seconds he had the door open. By this time Cornell had a full beard, his hair was down to his waist, he smelled like a garbage dump. Cornell looked back at Sir Bob. He was nearly dead; his rib cage could be seen. All they had to drink over the period of time was a cup of coffee that Sir Bob had brought. They took one sip a day to stay alive. Cornell walked over to Sir Bob, picked him up and dusted him off.
"With my agile thinking, Sir Bob, I have finally opened the door." As Cornell looked in, you could see the exasperation across his face. Sir Bob looked in. Trying not to laugh, cause he didn't have that much energy, so if he did laugh he would die. So he didn't laugh.
Inside the closet was a secret door that the criminal had escaped through, with a messasge on the floor that said, "see you Christmas time." Cornell squatted down grabbed the note then started for the door, and he told his repugnant assistant to follow him. Cornell grabbed the doorknob and it fell off. He then pushed the door, it fell off its hinges, then fell to the floor and shattered. Cornell looked around noticing that the entire building was about to fall. "Run!!" Cornell yelled.

To be continued...

Authors note: Please tell me if I did good in starting off. Cause I've already wrote this a long time ago and I'm just copying it from a typed paper. So give me clue and tell if its good.

Dream as if you'll live forever, live as if you'll die today. - James Dean


The following comments are for "The Adventures of Cornell Omrick: Story 1: Chapter 1"
by Witness95

oh dear.
For starters, what you want to know is if you did -well-.

On that same note, your composition needs an immense amount of grammatical work. The English language is manipulable to the extent of allowing one to write coherent, involving stories that have a number of 'improper' sentences and sentence fragments. However, this first requires a working knowledge of grammar- you can't break the rules 'til you know what they are.

There are elements in this story which could be quite humorous, if worked out properly. In fact, it reminds me of a story I wrote a while back about a fellow whose first name was 'Professor'.

Hope this has been of some help.

( Posted by: Beckett Grey [Member] On: January 23, 2002 )

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