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I want to tell you that you are plain
I want to make you go insane
I want to hang you in a closet
I want to scream at you when you cry because of it
Just like you did to me
I want to slam you into a wall
I want to kick you whenever you fall
I want to tell you that you are bad
I want to be insensitive when you are sad
Just like you did to me
I want to make you want to die
I want to laugh at you when you cry
I want to make you think I will take your side
I want to make you want to commit suicide
Just like you did to me
I want to hit you with a two-by-four
I want to knock you to the floor
Just like you did to me
I want to tell you that you are a disgrace
I want to smack and scratch your face
Just like you did to me
I want to revoke the words ‘I love you’
AND THEN I WANT TO HATE YOU!


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The following comments are for "Wish list for mother"
by Gami

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thanks for the input,I'm going to remove that, it does detract a little and yea it is based on things that I lived through in my childhood, though i did embellish on the two-by-four, it was a wooden brush.

( Posted by: Gami [Member] On: April 13, 2004 )

Gami . wishing
I really liked this a lot. Embellishing is fine for the sake of a well crafted poem isn't it. After all that is one important reason for writing it. To make a good work. I wonder what it would sound and look like, if you saved the line "just like you did for me" till the end and then put the rest into four line stanza. I think it would have a real impact, but that may be just me. enjoyed this, regards huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: November 30, 2004 )





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