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I think I love him but who knows?
I see him as a dark rose
tempting yet he harms.
He is in love with some ugly whore
but he just can't see her to the core.
Maybe I am wrong but who is to judge
I just can't see her as he does.
Its time to give up,God knows I tried
but somehow he has me tied.
Why wont he see that i wannabe free?
Free from every tempting word,boy let me breathe
inhale and just leave.
Leave my fantaciese please!!

Guess whoes in love?No not me
Its just him and his buddy.
I was so caught up thinking 'bout him
that i couldn't see someone was in love with me.
I try to forget because I regret having a crush
and missing out on times I could of blushed.
Look at what I,ve been through,
bent over backwards just to be with you.

Now I am alone sitting at home,
his buddy warned me that this would be.
After all the frustration,pain and stress.
You just couldn't see the real me.
Well I guess it was just not meant to be,
Have a great life,I am so angry I cvould sream
yet it tears me up inside with pain.

Love is rewarding yet leaves you in pain.


The following comments are for "A Thing Called Love"
by AnGeL

first timer
I know its not perfect and there are a lot of mistakes but this is the first poem i have ever written so don't be too critical.I am open for advise

( Posted by: AnGeL [Member] On: April 6, 2004 )

thanx Claire it means a lot!

( Posted by: AnGeL [Member] On: April 8, 2004 )

its nice!
hi, I think for your first time writting a poem is great! you should keep writting more poems... I really like all the lines, maybe is the best poem Ive ever read.


( Posted by: marga [Member] On: June 9, 2004 )

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