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Laying near you and weeping inside,
so much you still choose to hide.
don't tell me I'm a distraction,
or state your love as a retraction.
my passion flows like a river with no end,
waiting for your love at every twist and bend.
confusion lives and contradictions sting,
it seems that love is an intangible thing.


------
John K Brewster
"Willows whiten, aspens quiver, little breezes dusk and shiver"- Lord Tennyson


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The following comments are for "intangible thing"
by johnb79

Put this to music, please!
You must be a singer, if not, you should write for one. This is simply fabulous. I need more. This can not be the end. Now, go back to your pad and write at least three more stanzas to this. Great job!!!

( Posted by: amethyst [Member] On: April 6, 2004 )

singer
Thanks! Yes, I love to sing, I may not be as good as I think I am though. I have always wanted to be more lyrical than poetic and I have friends that compare my writing syle to that of Mariah Carey, which I take is a compliment. She really gets in there and writes some strong lyrics even if the music isn't as good. You kow what is funny? I deleted exactly three stanzas becasue I like where it ended but I believe it should have been more to.

John

( Posted by: johnb79 [Member] On: April 6, 2004 )

I want to buy the CD!
Definately needs to be put to music!! Loved it!

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: April 6, 2004 )

yes, a song
This would make a great song, I agree. It is dreamy and good.

( Posted by: simone183 [Member] On: April 6, 2004 )





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