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1.our hearts
go out to you
they come back changed

our hearts
go out to you
they never come back

our hearts
go out

2.everybody break hearts
you're on an x-ray of a star

everybody trade parts
pull yourself together
smile and fall apart

3.he breathes through an open heart

he loves girls who don't love

girls that pick
boys over flowers

he loves girls that don't

she leaves through a broken heart

NOTE:these are strange little bits of a book idea I'm working on. Let me know what you think...but remember I'm fragile;)

I'm very ape and very nice


The following comments are for "god hates black sheep(excerpts)"
by Joe Quinn

You peeked my interest
Ok, I want to read your book. Sounds interesting, I'm curious, so I guess that means you are headed in the right direction.

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: April 6, 2004 )

they don't make any sence... but it makes me want to make a song out of it! lol I love it!

( Posted by: Gami [Member] On: June 15, 2004 )

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