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Pry this chest with your chef knives and
sharply wound me with your surmising eyes
I tire of the shout
and the ever-present angst-manifest
on the table: Why must you hail it in bold
in the living room
for all to see?
It was done.

Must I see it on breakfast
upfront with fat bulging pancakes
and be damned to remember this fault?
Reminds of your cooking and him.
And me and her and all that followed.
I could not go on and on for weeks
on regular days
but not when it is about you, you know;
I never thought love comes
in unexpected packages you see,
where even in rancid butter
and distasteful plates and spoons
sorry whispers are found in sweet sauce.
Lived and chopped in bitter barks
But swallowed in a mouthful and
commended as magnificent pasta.

Let it ring and echo and wail
in my ear everyday; that you had
your fault as I did mine.
But won't we still eat and dine
and in this vegas table tonight?


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The following comments are for "At Home, After the Fight"
by webguy

Women are strange creatures
If I have got this right. My interpretation is that this was brought up in front of everyone, 'for all to see' when you believed it was done. Speaking from personal experience, women generally don't do the done thing well. Often, in my case it is the feeling that it is not done. Can't really expand on that if I knew exactly what caused it I could fix it and not drive my husband crazy.

I really liked the interplay with food. Good food is kind of like love. Sometimes it's delicious and other times just so-so. I was a bit confused about the "I could not go on and on...but not when it's about you'
Did you mean I could not go on about the issue when it's about you? If so then it makes sense.
Otherwise, I liked this piece. Well done.

( Posted by: brandy [Member] On: April 6, 2004 )

interplay
I too Loved the the interplay with food! I'm sure every man and women has felt the same way about the other at some point in time. I know I do.
loved it!
Renea

( Posted by: flygirl1204 [Member] On: April 6, 2004 )

fight night
Thanks for the niceties guys, I appreciate it. I was inspired by a movie playing in my head of actual fights, and a compendium of experiences that I had, that, among other stories from people I know. So I figured this is something that alot of people really feel and experience. Including crazy fights where the guy is being humiliated etc.. girl stuff :)

with the line "I could not go on and on...but not when it's about you' it's the guy talking relentlessly, or the wife, whichever the case maybe, raising hell on past issues and all among other things like bad recipes etc., hahahaha. I think I would just like to resign to fate that couples are here fighting, and they fight because they desire the same things, same good food, same good lovin', etc. That unless acceptance comes along and they compromise and help each other out then fighting just continues night after night.

Sometimes after the fight we just want to stop and say, "Baby I'm tired of the fighting, but I love you, I'm sorry. Let's talk about it...It's you I want to be with still...let's work it out."

( Posted by: webguy [Member] On: April 7, 2004 )

At home after the fight
This was written well, sounded great, and was kind of funny all at the same time, great write!

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: May 19, 2004 )

After The Fight 1
I like this very much, webguy. Your part 2 in fact was the reason why I saw this page. The girls will like you for your poems, I know! LOL. Passionate. Candid. True.

I especially like the last two lines.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: July 2, 2004 )





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