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Black coils sink into the burning waters
Spreading poisons like ink,
snaking downward into the
milky flame,
Tangling on the jagged edge of reef.
Flooded cities beneath the mirror surface
Bearing reflection of the endless sky.
The cities blind to Fate.
Peacefully swaying in the water's soundless tranquility.
The darkness
dripping like tar, holding the underwater kingdom in a tight embrace.
Veins branch out violently!
A sudden heartbeat sending shock waves
in the sea of necture.
Arteries exposed in broken sidewalks.
Crude pulsations leave the city in ruins.
A ghost town, abandoned, now destroyed
A vague memory choked and clouded with coal
The underworld deaf and blind.
The churning surface quiets.
And the bride of this disease
hangs cruxified in time.
Laughing in His face; she's cruel but faithful.

Briggita M.

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'hangs crucified in time', my favourite line. Briggita, this is excellent work. Also read 'Those hands etc. found it very disturbing, if it's taken from experience, I suggest you speak to someone about a criminal assault, if you're still at school, perhaps a counsellor, if not, there surely is a helpline or something?
A lot of assumptions here, so I'll say no more, other than this, you have the right to be shown respect.
Be strong
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: Ogg [Member] On: April 18, 2004 )

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