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Taken up to the night, soft velvet night
I would that blankets held me warm and not arms
With joints of fingers and edged nails of ten at their end
Ready to bend and extend in distress and in love.
I would that the clouds cushion my head while I love in vain
All the things the earth below me possess
And obscure the stars of every quiet wrinkle, every last rasp
I would all those things for the sky's my ancient battlefield, my right eternal
Here I wrest fate and tumble hope till dizzy
We fall-
From the darkening sky, the deepening night.



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The conscious shape reality.


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The following comments are for "In Night"
by Furius

took awhile
the first time I read this, I found it just a tad bit confusing...but upon reading it few times over, it began to sink in...there was one spot where I wanted to add more, another line or two, right after "all the things the earth below me possess"...your on to something with this though, and I like it :)
Reba

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: March 31, 2004 )





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