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Tonight I may be a fart to the future!
I rode the glasgow streets upon my white horse looking for air.
I was struck by lighting, and now i am the dust that flys up "loose women's" panties.
I am now the privileged spirit of glasgow!
I am the drunk being sick on a dead cat in a bin, and i am the woman pulling the thong out of her arse when no-one is looking. I am the dog that kills a cat, i am the cat that kills a mouse, i am the mouse that kills a flea, i am the flea that sees the red glowing devil eyes in the drain, i am the demon that sits in the drain pissing in the water.

oh yes and I write crap poetry.
Come see my work, its written on the faces of every tired soul in Glasgow.

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The following comments are for "Spirit of Glasgow (in cinemas now!)"
by deathtowords

I've read a handful of your poems now and I can't truly decide whether I like them or not.

Your choice of images is interesting (not to be taken in the condescending way that that word is often used) and visceral - this is a good thing.

My problem with them is that they are rough. I'm not certain if that stems from inexperience or if it is just the phenotype of your particular style.

Either way, work on it and polish them a little (or don't). You have something and I should very much like to see it developed.

All in all I'd have to say, "Interesting but not terribly good...YET"

May you never thirst


( Posted by: Enforced Bliss [Member] On: April 4, 2004 )

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