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It was a day in summer
That I'll never have again.
It wasn't that I lost it,
I know where it went.

It started on the eve of life
When love was sore, and swollen.
And when they tried to force my love;
Her arms she would not open.

The day was when my life began,
Nurtured by my love.
Brought to me be in summertime;
Her hair streaked red with blood.

With pain and death my life began
And fear love'd pass away.
With calm and joy then life began
When love agreed to stay.

Clear and bright with happiness.
Ne'r a touch of gray.
'Til my spirit cast a shadow,
That clouded life where it lay.

Hooded and dark it came upon me.
Damp and cold; creeping.
Shading life and love of mine,
Of whom I should be keeping.

What was meant for me that day
Shall lie within the darkness.
Taunt and tease me with its glimmer,
Drying... in the darkness.



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The following comments are for "My Shadow"
by Philo

shadow
Philo, I truly enjoyed this poem...I'm not completely sure I'm understanding the 'meaning' of it...but I've gathered my own interpretation :)...great use of words...the only problem I had was the last line...drying?...but again perhaps my interpretation is different from the one you meant...good work none the less...oh and by the way, thank you for your comment on my poem 'the moon's affair with mars'...I guess I've always thought of the moon as a he...the man in the moon?...;)
Reba

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: March 30, 2004 )

Philo
The soft imagery juxtaposed against the harsher images are really powerful in this Philo. I really like this piece.

"When love was sore, and swollen." That's one of my favorite lines.

I found the final line of particular interest also, "Drying...in the darkness."
At first I wasn't sure why it threw me. Then I realized that for me it summoned an image of laundry drying in the sunlight, and how cold and drawn the process of 'drying' anything would be in the darkness.
Almost like it would be left to fester there and, as the poem states, 'taunt and tease'. A permanently 'wet' memory.
Hope that makes sense.

Best wishes,
Juniper

( Posted by: Juniper [Member] On: July 21, 2004 )

Annebel Lee
This poem is very reminiscent of Poe - who I enjoy very much. I too am not totally sure that I understand what is going on in the poem, but the beginning of an idea of this is starting to germinate within.

( Posted by: magnitus [Member] On: October 16, 2004 )

My Shadow
I am so happy I discovered the "wonderful world of Philo." I enjoyed and was saddened by this poem at the same time. I have to say I was hoping you were going to comment back and explain it some but nope. Hmmm, maybe now as it is per request? Hope so. Great read!

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: January 25, 2005 )

Shadowy Response
I haven't responded to questions on this poem Nae because this one is so close. I thought quite a bit about not posting this at all. I drafted this years ago after my daughter was born and had to put it down. I recently found it and finished it.

Things did not go so well when she was born. I was angry and scared when I originally drafted this and was surprised at how fresh the feelings were when I found it again.

Wonderful world of philo indeed. I'm afraid I'll have to leave the rest in the past, but I'm glad you liked it and I'm grateful you came to read it. Sorry if I've disappointed.

I promise I won't be so tight lipped on my other posts. -Philo

( Posted by: philo [Member] On: January 25, 2005 )

No disappointment
Philo, on the contrary. I totally understand. I have a few poems that hurt too much, and I'd never be able to explain them. Makes them all the more powerful. I will continue my journey of reading you today. Thanks, Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: January 26, 2005 )

Good Read
I really enjoyed reading this post and I especially like the last two lines "Taunt and tease me with its glimmer,
Drying... in the darkness." I dont know what it is but that line is really appealing to me.

( Posted by: poetfreak [Member] On: March 15, 2005 )

poet freak in shadow
Thanks for coming by to read and sending me this comment. I'm glad you liked it.

I don't write the dark stuff very often as I'm not one that lives with that constant coppery tang of angst in my mouth. But when I get it, I've got to spit it out. I'm glad I was able to make something of it. Thanks again. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: March 15, 2005 )

Philo
I think I enjoyed this one the most. I addmit my initial interpretation was way off and I'm probably not alone. Yet I think that's whats so drawing about this piece.

( Posted by: SeanMicheals [Member] On: April 16, 2005 )

in Shadow
Thanks Sean Micheals, I'm glad you looked this up and enjoyed. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: April 17, 2005 )





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