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All In A Day
January 9th, 2002 - March 28th, 2004

When the sun hits my world
Sparkling trances dance on the water
A million chances of new unfold
Shooting forward, unable to maneuver

Heat melts what once was solid
Reservoir collects and is overflowing
Lands of masses have become shifted
Swelling and shaking, my world is aching

One huge ball of fire in the sky
Delivers light to engulf the land
Constantly sending an endless supply
Heating up and causing to expand

Clouds quickly come rolling
Darkness devourers the landscape
Winds pick up strong and sing
Carving the mountains into shape

The water falls from a great height
Hitting the ground far below
Observing this, a magnificent sight
Watching the creation of a plateau

One good long stretch is all i need
To crack my bones and awaken my nerves
And then allow the day to proceed
Following the horizon till it curves

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The following comments are for "All In A Day"
by eyescovered

beautiful
I really liked this. it has alot of meaning hidden behind the words. i really liked this one, to sum the whole poem up you wrote:

'One good long stretch is all i need
To crack my bones and awaken my nerves
And then allow the day to proceed
Following the horizon till it curves'

that was awesome! keep up the wonderful work.. i'll be around to read more of your pieces. i know i'll enjoy them as much as i enjoyed this one. it really put a smile upon my face. it has a soothing voice beneath the words. very good imagery. *hug*

Vanessa

( Posted by: Rene4Ever [Member] On: March 29, 2004 )

As Always
As Always your work is amazing!

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: March 30, 2004 )





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