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In my nocturnal sojourns down by the sea,
I move, eyes closed, but heart wide awake.
Clouds hover over, like dragons protecting a key,
And owls pray for my blind soul’s sake.

Clothed in white, but with naked stone feet
I float noiselessly by the sleeping shore.
Many would think me as an angel they might greet,
When in reality, I am (ashamedly) a transitory whore.

The waters shyly lick my salty skin,
Burning marks, like a rock being torched.
I try to erase my laughing stains of Sin,
And watch my white robes being silently scorched.

Suddenly, a blanket of fish swarm upon me
In a sparkling wave of life, diamond and wet.
And as the Darkness grows, I wretchedly see
How I have been caught in my own false life’s net….



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Servitas a Periculum

Servatis a Maleficum


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The following comments are for "Aftermath"
by blightedstar

blightedstar
excellent piece...I can't tell you how much I enjoyed this...the only bit that I had a problem with was stone feet are noiseless?...maybe it's just me...;)...great job and I'll be reading more of your work so keep em coming !
Reba

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: March 30, 2004 )

queen of goth
that's what i'm gonna have to call you from now on;) every poem it always hits me that not a word is wasted, it always seems to fit and flow just so which is a mark of talent;)

( Posted by: Joe Quinn [Member] On: March 30, 2004 )

thanks
Thank you Reba for your post and I will maybe re-think the "stone feet" line :)
Joe - muchos gracias for calling me the queen of goth - quite a compliment!

( Posted by: blightedstar [Member] On: March 31, 2004 )

Divine
I truly loved this it's one of the nicest I have read in while. You painted the frame of mind perfectly. So well it was effortless for me to place the words. Gorgeous altogether.
Cat

( Posted by: C.Lynagh [Member] On: April 2, 2004 )





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