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My world and yours apart

I weep I stand-alone and I weep.
A myriad of emotions swirling
Fragile and delicate
It dances,
Mocking me
Shaming me to break
Taunting me to gather it all up
And disperse it
For all to tread upon.
It lingers upon me
To pull me into that insanity
Thereafter a waif
Cold and unfeeling
An eternal mourning.

If it should collide it would throw us asunder

And this is my destruction that you caused
With your dreams, hopes, visions.
So bold you saw and wanted.
But time came and stole your patience - stole your promises.
You could not hold onto the truth that awaits the other end
So you scattered off and found some constancy to hold to.
I could not be that balance you sought
You cast me of
And shattered all
How quickly you forget.

And we fall apart

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The following comments are for "And we fall apart"
by savaf

The first part of this poem is awesome filled with great imagery and metaphor..and then it just falls into a bit of a rant...leave room for reader interpretation although I know that is sometimes hard to do when the subject is upclose and personal.

( Posted by: jaycee [Member] On: March 27, 2004 )

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