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Night fancy mantle covers shoulders
Dissolving in the morning breeze.
The way I walk today can tell you
That I have seen you in my dreams.

Reverberation of the heart beat
The only beacon on the thin,
But dangerously heavy roadway
Where cloak laces throttle me.


------
Sua sponte,
O.


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The following comments are for "- morning walk -"
by City

~Morning breeze
City--

I enjoyed this poem very much. Nicely written.

Blessings,


{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: March 24, 2004 )

Thank you Jeannie
!!
this is very important for me as English is my second language, so... if there is something that you'd suggest in terms of grammer or style - I'll appreciate it

( Posted by: City [Member] On: March 24, 2004 )





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