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My Heart is bleeding
Darling u drive me Insane
Have i anymore done wrong
U have to drive that stake down
When i lie asleep

Asleep, not
I saw u enter on yours toes
And the stab with all your might
My tears infused with blood
You never noticed
The love i bare for you even when u caged me

My Mind is spinning
It fails to stop
It goes on a dance
On it's own accord
Sweating as much blood it can afford to

But they will stop when i die
When i die, i will grow younger.

U will then see
My blood and flesh
Is all that i hv left for u
U already had everything else

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The following comments are for "Vampire"
by ^white

Great name for a poem. I clicked on this link immediately.

It is a sorrowful tale of lost love, and we feel a membrane of sacrifice and atonement. Ultimately, the title, which refers to an undead creature, can only suggest an unhappy ending.

Compact and fullsome. Good shot.

( Posted by: jbicko [Member] On: March 27, 2004 )

hey thx!
Thanks alot~! :) I wasn't thinking of the title when i wrote this poem. It actually came to me rite after that! Guess it was becoz i'm studying literature that has to do with Goth now too! Thx!

( Posted by: ^white [Member] On: March 27, 2004 )

May I suggest that you spell all the words out next time. It is hard to take a poem serious when there are words like "u" and "hv".

( Posted by: Schaard [Member] On: March 28, 2004 )

Okie..I'm sorry, it's accidentally slipped my mind because I was too into the poem, the words juz kept flowing. I didn't realise the mistake until it's published. I'll take note.

( Posted by: ^white [Member] On: March 29, 2004 )

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