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I watched you walk away.
Every step farther pervades my heart,
Cracking through it like a boulder through thin ice.
Your words drove themselves through me,
as if they were jagged spikes picking and chipping away at my bleeding, exposed love;
uninhibited passion that I sent your way.
I cry my love for you,
vainly desperate to hold you once more.
But every word I speak propels you further away,
swiftly speeding you out of my reach,
away from my touch.
These cold, lifeless hands strain for you.
I'm gasping, my breath caught in my throat.
And still you refuse to look back at me.
You can't even spare a simple glance down towards my prostrate body,
exposed for the world.
You're out of my sight, I'm out of your mind.
You were everything to me but I'm nothing to you.

------
-Punx make better lovers-


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The following comments are for "- Love song for those who have lost all hope -"
by blackheartedpunk

cool
I've had the Deftones in my head all day and this fit with that, really cool and powerful, good ending.

( Posted by: Joe Quinn [Member] On: March 27, 2004 )

Good job!
Its an amazing display of emotion, one quetion tho..
Fait pleurer ton coeur pour moi, et je va prendre toi dans mes bras comme la plus belle richesse dans la monde! ;)

( Posted by: EndlessFear [Member] On: April 1, 2004 )





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