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You stare at me with blank eyes as I confess my feelings.
Keep staring as I continue on, losing confidence with each passing moment, every ticking second.

The sound of my heart pounding in my ears will deafen me.

Like a rush of blood to the head, your single provocative statement brings me back to reality.
A reality in which we can never be.
A harsh, cruel realization that the world cannot be viewed in black and white.

So I take my leave, whimpering an apology,
Trying to find a diplomatic escape as I turn and hide my reddening face, watering eyes.
And yet your eyes remain blank and unmoved as my heart shatters at your feet.

-Punx make better lovers-

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The following comments are for "- A vain chance at romance -"
by blackheartedpunk

ten! you know why?
Read the poem and youll know why

( Posted by: EndlessFear [Member] On: March 24, 2004 )


This is an outstanding poem. I enjoyed the read.



( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: March 24, 2004 )

Well thanks EndlessFear & Jeannie! I'm just getting into this, so it's awesome to hear that my stuff isnt too bad :)

- Take care kids -

( Posted by: blackheartedpunk [Member] On: March 24, 2004 )

I'm impressed!
I am so glad your title caught my eye, I loved this poem!!! I look forward to reading your work.

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: March 26, 2004 )

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