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Just wait.
I'll be dancing on your grave,
As blackened angels with tattered wings sound the trumpets dug up from the depths of hell.
I'll parade around, pounding on the diseased earth which covers your tomb, mocking you with every step.
Your life, a wasted existence. Your death causes none to mourn.
The angels call out horrid notes played on trumpets screaming apathy; and still no tears are shed with sympathy.
Enjoy your afterlife, spent fleeing from haunting demons, echoes of your mortal mistakes.
Your tombstone will crack and crumble, mimicking your soul.
And still I dance upon your grave.

------
-Punx make better lovers-


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The following comments are for "-A slow tango with rejected angels-"
by blackheartedpunk

Good job
Holy shat, its like something id write but it looks more detailed. Your on your way up there, good stuff with throwing in the punctuation people will enjoy reading it more :) keep up the great work. you get a ten this time

( Posted by: EndlessFear [Member] On: March 24, 2004 )

Dark, but you're good.
When you got it you got it, and boy do you have it. You are an amazing writer!

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: March 26, 2004 )





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