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The Moon has his company of stars.
They all gather 'round to hear his tales
of the affair he had with Mars.
Into the night, her secret's he unveils.

'Ah, Mars. She was a beautiful one
not too many light years ago.
We roamed around the galaxy, having our fun,
that is, until we had our roe.

Her heaving bossom gave life,
to many a flower and tree.
I once even asked her to be my wife,
so she would open her valleys for me.

Her streams and lakes were crystal clear.
Her life giving nectar tasted so sweet.
But her temperment I began to fear,
for her tears would rain down with a drum's rythmic beat.

One glorious night we went for a stroll
down across the Milky-Way.
She told me that her heart I had stole,
and asked me to come with her to stay.

When I told her I could not go,
for my night-watchman's post I could not yield,
she stormed about to and fro,
destroying her rivers and fields.

I left her that night, never to return,
and I supposed that's for the best.
I sat at my post and watched Mars burn,
leaving nothing for herself but emptiness.'

The Moon has his company of stars.
They all gather 'round to hear his tales
of the affair he had with Mars.
While into the night, Mars weeps behind her veils.


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The following comments are for "The Moon's Affair With Mars"
by Reba

How Cute This Is...
Reba;

I enjoyed reading this poem. I loved the title also, "The Moon's affair with Mars" too cute.

Blessings,


{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: March 24, 2004 )

Yes But...
I like it. Anthropomorphism of the planets gives a mythical quality and charm to your poem, but you've changed their sexes! I've always thought of the moon as female (Selene) and Mars as male (Ares) so I had trouble getting past that. One other thing: a light year is a measurement of distance (how far light travels in a year.) Sorry to be picky but I stumbled on these things and without them, your poem may shine even brighter.

-philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: March 27, 2004 )

Poor Moon
I have a new respect for Mars, I loved this!!

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: April 13, 2004 )





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