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The evening is sharp with malignant birds,
Who cry of lost paths and broken wings.
In their grief, I lose my thirst for words.
Of its estrangement, a lone thrush sings.

I bend to sip from the shining pool,
Which meets my mouth like a hungry lover.
I want to seduce this blue aquatic jewel
Into throwing off its shy silver cover.

For I am standing now, raw and chaste,
And aching to awaken my unconscious soul;
Which knows only that beautiful things donít last,
And that love is playing a double-sided role.

The birds are asleep, and no longer despair.
The moon eyes me, in the distant North.
And I wish I could escape my emotional lair,
And let my virgin soul venture forth.

As I stand there, naked in the disapproving night,
And lessen my breaths, till I am completely still,
I sense that I am in someoneís secret sight,
Someone closing in, like a wolf for the kill.

In fear and haste, I run to the wood.
A sob breaks on my trembling lips;
For I was so close to all that was Good,
And now, my soul has again been eclipsed.


------
Servitas a Periculum

Servatis a Maleficum


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The following comments are for "Soul"
by blightedstar

Soul
BlightedStar;

I enjoyed this poem very much. It was breath taking.

Blessings,


{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: March 20, 2004 )

wonderful language
it has such a classical feel, I loved the second verse the best, it had amazing images.

( Posted by: Joe Quinn [Member] On: March 22, 2004 )

blighted star
Wonderful poem!

( Posted by: mishy [Member] On: September 23, 2004 )





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