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You left the door half-closed behind you,
I keep it that way, still,
and sometimes look through it to find you,
and sometimes wonder if I will

at night, in bed,
my pillow beneath my head,
my fingers touch the pillow across the spread
and I mistake the true,
and, half-asleep, drifting off,
make love to a dream of you

it hurts, the way we play this game,
the way we make it be,
yet, love, I miss you, all the same -
when are you coming back for me?





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The following comments are for "You left the door half-closed"
by johnlibertus

Door half-closed
JohnLibertus;

You are a very poetic person. I admire all of your work. This is a beautiful, yet well written poem.

Blessings,


{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: March 17, 2004 )

Romantic
I like this poem, it's very short and romantic. I especially like the title. It's so casually poetic.

( Posted by: Glass hair of a virgin bride [Member] On: March 17, 2004 )

power in simplicity
john~

This is excellent stuff. I love the opening lines especially. You have no need for preamble or explanation with this piece, and you thus wisely avoided it. Great and powerful poetry like this stands up just fine all alone.

Touching and moving stuff, my friend. I Enjoyed reading it.

Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: March 17, 2004 )

incredible
Incredible poem, John. A priveledge to read.

( Posted by: die_daily [Member] On: March 18, 2004 )

door
short and to the point, longing and bitter-sweet

great

( Posted by: Sneaky [Member] On: March 18, 2004 )

Half closed...
I read about you from other poets on exposed and had to seek out your work, now I understand what all the hype is about! I love your work. I am so happy there is so much of it here to read!

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: May 10, 2004 )





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