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warm breezes in morn'
the sound of northern birds chime
georgia spring.

------
John K Brewster
"Willows whiten, aspens quiver, little breezes dusk and shiver"- Lord Tennyson


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The following comments are for "early spring"
by johnb79

Spring
Johnb79;

This is a very good haiku. Although the [1st] line seems a little bit choppy to me. But the [2nd] and [3rd] line blew me away. nonetheless, I enjoyed the read very much.

Blessings,


{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: March 16, 2004 )

I dream of Jeannie
I can always count on you to give me positive feedback, thank you so much.
JohnB

( Posted by: johnb79 [Member] On: March 16, 2004 )

Spring
John
I could hear the birds singing and feel the warm breezes on my face...great job

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: March 16, 2004 )

almost perfect
this is a beautiful haiku that I enjoyed very much...in my books it would be perfect, only nothing is perfect, so that would make it almost perfect ;)...that's why I gave ya a perfect score...hehe...great job
p.s. I've noticed your haiku's are coming along quite beautifully, you have a knack ;)
Reba

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: March 17, 2004 )





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