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My life has changed since I made out my Will.
Nothing major, just a few changes, no big deal.

My wife changed my diet, the things that I eat
Lotís of chocolate cake, and big slabs of meat.

The kids watch me, as if I am crazy
And jot down things that seem a little hazy.

There seems to be a lot more murder novels in the house
And how much rat poison does it take to kill a mouse?

Lately, when I sleep, Iíve had nightmares
About things someone has left on the stairs.

Oh well, itís probably nothing, a state of mind
Just something about the paper, that I undersigned.


------
Eddie Mikell


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The following comments are for "M y Life Has Changed Since I Made Out My Will"
by CaptainKeyboard

cyanide and cake
Hey, Captain Keyboard, I like what you've got going here. I was a little thrown off by the meter (which kind of jumped around -- now short, now long) but other than that this is quite good. Kudos.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: March 15, 2004 )

This gave me a chuckle
Just watch out for the Greasy Meatballs in the pasta....then you'll know she means business...I loved it

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: March 15, 2004 )

Meter
All,
I dug out my old (ancient?) English books and reviewed the stuff about flow, meter, etc., and of, couse, it is choppy. I'll ponder the flow, and revise. I have also just noticed how close the hair dryer is to the bathtub. Hmmm.. Let's see dryer, fryer.. Yikes!

( Posted by: captainkeyboard [Member] On: March 15, 2004 )

Started out smiling
ended up laughing! My favorite line is about the rat poison! Talk about someone who needs to wake up and smell the coffee - but wait - that might be lethal too. Great poem.

( Posted by: amethyst [Member] On: March 16, 2004 )

poison
Hehe, a nice chuckle and who says that paranoids don`t have enemies?

Good Job

( Posted by: Sneaky [Member] On: March 17, 2004 )





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