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As I stare at my reflection
in a taunting, misty window
it fades into the dark night
and with it, I too, must go

forgotten in the stars
slipping back into the past
having nothing to hold on to
as it all happens to fast

the tears I'll never cry
are lodged inside my brain
the world is spinning 'round me
but it all stays just the same

you stand in front of me
and look into my scared eyes
and when you hold my hands in yours
there's a chance that I can't die

I'm holding on to nothing
and everything at once
the pain is wearing me down
sometimes its just too much

I know now that you'll hold me
if these tears, I allow to flow
and if I fade into the darkness
I know, you too, will go

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The following comments are for "Helpless"
by B*Dizzle

Holding on

Wow! I like this very much. u paint a good imagery here. great poem!



( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: March 13, 2004 )

thats better
thanks claire, I think I'll take you up on your suggestion about stanza 6. I had something else in mind, but it didnt come out the way I had it in my head. I appreciate your help!

( Posted by: B*Dizzle [Member] On: April 8, 2004 )

inside out
It's hard to feel ignored
when you're on the center stage
& It's hard to feel so young
when your face is worn with age

when my mind is skipping channels
and clear emotions are but a dream
It's now that Im realizing
that I am not what I seem

It's hard to feel abused
when everyone's envying you
and It's hard to feel fortunate
when you find you're trapped in truth

When my thoughts are sending messages
to everyone but me
It's now that I'm realizing
that I am not what I seem

please don't try to fix me
because you'll only grow more perturbed
with the way I go about this
my actions may come as absurd

( Posted by: B*Dizzle [Member] On: August 15, 2004 )

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