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spiraling downward
brittle bodies under-foot
carpeting the ground.


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The following comments are for "a walk in autumn"
by Reba

Leaves
I can feel them crunching under my shoes...I like the brittle bodies imagery...very good

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: March 17, 2004 )

bodies
thanks for your comments ladies :)
autumn is my fav time of year too.
Pen, the reason I used 'bodies' was because I wanted to show frailty, I know brittle already does that, but I sort of wanted to reiterate it. there is a time and a season, and fall is sort of the end of summer's life, it's last breath (hey that gives me another idea for yet another haiku ;))...hope this gives a little more understanding as to why I chose the words I did :) thanks again
Reba

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: March 17, 2004 )





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