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Concrete defiling her virgin bled eyes
INSIGNIFICANT and bruised
she runs a skeleton hand across her wrists
the mirror that is her doll enveloping in panic

Mirror mirror on the wall...who's the most broken of them all?

Her sinewy bones rattle in deprivation as alarm clock raindrops soak her black makeup
salvation, damnation

A martyr for her own insecurities
narcissistic drama queen,
oops souls already dead
she can't beg for more, can't lose anymore
so she stares, eyes malignant, into her own diesease

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Briggita M.


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The following comments are for "mirror mirror on the wall..whose the most broken of them all"
by Glass hair of a virgin bride

some tasty bits, but
I think this piece shows a lot of promise. There are several lines that are startlingly good in their imagery, but the formatting and glaring spelling errors weaken the work considerably. Keep at it though, you have definate potential.

Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: March 10, 2004 )

Brilliant imagery
This sounds to be inspired by the novels of Tanith Lee or E.A.Poe.
I once used bible refs to Babylon etc. for a poem. Even so, it has a distinctive voice, your voice. Hope to read more soon.
Chihuahua
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: Ogg [Member] On: March 12, 2004 )





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