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Tall and lean, sad and intelligent
They step out of the darkness
A smile as the light passes the retina
Always when I'm feeling restless
"You are so wonderful", said to me
As my head is lovingly caressed
"This will make us feel wonderful"
I think this is what is best

Their hands on mine show me darker
Piled bodies crammed into a place
Out of the way yet convenient,
Dimly lit, yet I can still make out a face
My mind shuts off, their body wanders
I can't remember if they enter me
Or am I inside of them somehow
Am I hallucinating, wanting to be free?

It's my fault for being naive
So I carefully wash my skin
I cry myself to sleep that night
My sanity is running thin
After breakfast I can pretend
That nothing ever occurred
But some days when I feel blue
Pain succumbs me, I am blurred.

strength - if you hurt this person with your kindness,
seduce - if you hope they want to be your friend,
crime - if you don't know if it's okay to say no,
Is it rape?

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The following comments are for "strength / seduce / crime"
by Miku

strong topic, strong language
It's not an easy thing to read a poem about such a violation, and it's even more difficult to answer the thorny questions you ask in the end of the poem.

You have a fresh take on the subject, and use your words with care. All in all a good poem.

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: March 10, 2004 )

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