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She passes through bones and slices the soul
A ghost that wears no translucent sheet
A lover, that breaks the heart over and over
A life-time comfort, turned haunting pain

Daily her liquid possesses my loved ones
The daemon's secured it's place through addiction
I cannot escape as she enters through echoes
And echoes she does, as the sound shatters core

The soul-pieces slither through body and fall
To ground as filled up is this new Inner hole
With pain and the echo, her black liquid snakes
Through the daughter who fought, though cannot raise up now


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The following comments are for "She, The Sound Of The Opening Lager Can"
by A. Cain

amazing
it's true what claire said, this poem is perfect. great job.

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: June 18, 2004 )

A Fan
There is nothing I can say to express my love of this piece. I like the way it moves, the way it expresses emotions left unsaid, and the words were artfuly chosen, I plan to read the rest of your work.
Thanks for the inspiration!

-Lisa

( Posted by: Scryer [Member] On: November 23, 2004 )

Awesome.
You're a bardess.

( Posted by: The Alienist [Member] On: November 26, 2004 )





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