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i look at myself at the mirror
there are static, sapphiric dreams;
stark reflection of a remnant boy
coated in mercurial thoughts

from hangover years
or lost in the polished, smirkings
of a speaking glass:
"rehearse your sorrows,
trust your worthy laughters,"
i see those years barren of songs

i say goodbye to my parents,
sleeping away to old, strange lullabyes
love trap in old, mute albums
forgotten pictures
of a thousand clouds, reality, and gifts

of this change called I Am

now old, since i look into myself
at the mirror
which the kids use with glee
fixing hair, make faces,
hating themselves cry
in front of it when their Mother
failed to put her favorite lipstick
yesterday; till forever.

so i look at my mirror;
mentor of inescapable truth,
sage of age telling this Return

but i cannot steal time
as i look deeply
myself with intuition,
simply, a glass of my sheer,
flawed
existence

------
Be daring, be different, be impractical, be anything that will assert integrity of purpose and imaginative vision against the play-it-safers, the creatures of the commonplace, the slaves of the ordinary. -- Sir Cecil Beaton (1904-1980) English photographer


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The following comments are for "The Disillusionment Called Mirror"
by Idomis

self conscious
I like what you're doing here.

I must admit, I was as concerned as Jessicanm with the lipstick line, though my interpretation was that she didn't leave it out where it could be found. What's the real story?

I think there are places where punctuation might help. For instance in the first line where Jess sees an in, I thought a simple comma before at might have made your intention clear.

Over all, a very intriguing stab at a difficult subject. I like.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: March 6, 2004 )

disengaged within
Jessica, it's a self-detached awareness "from" the mirror. A what-if scenario for the persona of his reality. Ergo, "at."

Also, your second comment. I might have been vague or ambiguous here, but the lines maybe were not that strong, as in:

failed to put her favorite lipstick/yesterday; till forever.

I so wanted to pull off a familiarly strange subject, but maybe, it fizzled themselves crying "in" the mirror. They can't accept their mother passed away.

I must admit, this one's too difficult to portray -- to disengage from yourself and look at realities from another point of view, and still, get in touched with what's going on.

Thank you both for your comments

( Posted by: idomis [Member] On: March 7, 2004 )

erratum: disengaged within
I so wanted to pull off a familiarly strange subject, but maybe, it fizzled out so soon. They hated themselves crying "in" the mirror. They can't accept their mother passed away.

On the one side, is there like an "Edit Comment" functionality here? I'd like to suggest one.

Thanks.

( Posted by: idomis [Member] On: March 7, 2004 )

Laugh Worthy
If existence was flawed...
it would be worthy of laughter...
if laughter even existed...

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: August 6, 2016 )





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