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Shakuhachi plays
the loneliest sound on earth
ice-blue in winter

across snow-capped mountain peak
echoing so plaintively

they call each other
two lovers separated
waiting for the spring

then the first snowdrops blossom
trembling anticipation

battle of flowers
ends with his soft surrender
and their love's sweet scent

musky aromas mingle
then part for another year.

(A shakuhachi is a traditional Japanese
woodwind instrument. I found a recording
in my local library;
'The Splendour of the Shakuhachi'.)

In five hundred years time, most of us will be forgotten dust. But Hitler will still be remembered, God loves irony.

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The following comments are for "Shakuhachi"
by Ogg

I used to own a shakuhachi. I used to love that breathy, pan-pipe-like sound that an expert can make on the instrument. I ended up giving it to a flautist who nailed that sound the first time she tried it.

I tried the duduk for a while after that. The duduk is a double-reed instrument that's the devil to play. Ended up giving that thing away, too.

I'll stick with brasswinds. They like me.

Lovely piece, by the way. Beautiful, sensuous imagery, and convincing tactile dimension.

( Posted by: gsmonks [Member] On: March 8, 2004 )

beautiful work here...what great visions your words have inspired me :)

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: March 8, 2004 )

Very nice Tanka's You have here. I love the imagery you painted here, also loved the last two drop down lines. very clever of you



( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: March 8, 2004 )

Talk about rapid response - thanks guys, I'm a bit overwhelmed. You really like this, don't you? Doh with cheesy grins all round.
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: March 8, 2004 )

hey paul this was a good write, ne way u write to me on every poem and a lot of people do. this is becaus i am one of the youngest writers here. ne way when i wrote How to Write? that wasnt tword you it was toward this person who said i shouldnt write about sad thing s and sorrow...also in Where are you Greg? when you said it wasnt imaginative thats for a reason. this is the EXACT thing that happened to greg, my best friend, ne way great writeing and love!

( Posted by: how do i live with this shame [Member] On: March 11, 2004 )

Thanks, Trish
You'd said you hated the sound of someone's voice, so it was a bit unlikely to have been me (wake up Paul - doh!). Try to humour us old folk. Glad to see you listening to constructive advice, from loadsa people on this site, but don't be afraid to stick by your guns if you think you're right.
Best Wishes
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: Ogg [Member] On: March 12, 2004 )

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