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Your fragile beauty
radiating from within
humming bird frailty.

In five hundred years time, most of us will be forgotten dust. But Hitler will still be remembered, God loves irony.

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The following comments are for "Luv Yer (dedicated to my wife)"
by Ogg

hey, ogg?
isn't hummingbird one word?

or did you do that on purpose? i mean, it works as is; i see what you're trying to do, if you're trying to do anything... uh... i see what you *could* be trying to do, if you're not making a mistake; i mean... aww, shit... not that mistakes are bad...

(i love it)

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: March 6, 2004 )

I agree with Jessica...beautiful piece, great work.

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: March 6, 2004 )

Great haiku
It would be wonderful if more people found the beauty inside others and not just the outside superficial looks...pretty is as pretty does...this poem reeks of LOVE....What a guy! I loved it

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: March 6, 2004 )

Hey Ark
You're right, it should be all one word, that hummingbird, let's face facts, this is crappy rap.
Paul The Ogg

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: March 7, 2004 )

Silly Ogg
This is good stuff. Maybe a little vague, but still delivers it's point. I like where it goes.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: March 7, 2004 )

My hubby...
never wrote anything for me! She's a lucky lady that yoou feel this way. Nice job!

( Posted by: Cynical_Scribe [Member] On: July 12, 2004 )

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