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The slow steady rhythm of the tabla
Guides the caravan through the desert

My hands caress the air
My wrists coil and summon
My arms draw circles around my head
My shoulders rise and fall
My breasts heave as with heavy breath
My back ripples like waters currant
My belly curls like waves
My waist twists these movements around
My hips count the beats

Tat
Tat
Tat tat tat
Tat
Tat

My legs weave and spin the spell
My ankles tinkle the bells
My feet pivot and turn

The slow steady rhythm of the tabla
Guides my soul through making love to you



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The following comments are for "Solo Tabla"
by Majnuna

This sings...
I really enjoyed this. I picture a whirling dirvish making beautiful dance. Great imagery.

( Posted by: Zachary Martin Glass [Member] On: March 5, 2004 )

did it have to end with sex?
acccch... you know, i was kind of excited to see a poem about the tabla... but i really wish that the poem didn't end in a surprise sex scene at the end that i didn't realize i'd been watching. couldn't it just have been about the tablas? i think that would have been richer, somehow...

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: March 6, 2004 )

sex on the brain
i wasnt thinking about sex when i wrote this...maybe u were?! :) i was listening to the tabla when this came to me and felt the words and saw the dance in the sound. couldn't it just be that the dance is making love to the music?...this WAS just about the tabla...

( Posted by: majnuna [Member] On: March 6, 2004 )

makin love in the brain ? perhaps in the desert?
That was amazing image and little bit hotty
but didn’t likwe the way it ends up with makin love….it would be better if u end it with something not sensual but rather spiritual…like a flying ur soul flying…..for example.
Did u manage that dance is doin so to the music when u wrote it down??

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: March 17, 2004 )

tat tat tat tat
Marvelous poem. Sensuous. You are a lovely dancer.

The tabla is such a wonderful instrument. I also like the sarongi.

Been reading some of your older posts tonight and enjoying your poems very much. Your voice is consistent and true.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: July 18, 2006 )





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