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All alone at night
Nothing to do
No one to talk to
It takes patience to get what I want
It takes patience that I donít haveÖ

I slowly wait, in angst
Waiting for the day to come
When I can be with her, embraced
Sweet romantic music runs
Through my ears
As I dream of drawing close to her

My patience is running thin
Time becomes an enemy
Thinking back to when time was truly the worst thing imaginable
Its funny how bad timing can impact life so drastically

Being at the wrong place
At the wrong time lost her life
She had done nothing but go to the store
To pick some stuff up

Selfish Foolish Arrogant men
Wanting everything
Took her away from me
Robbing the store just before she walked in
Of course she didnít hear them tell everyone
Not to move or else they would be no more

So she walks in and loses her life
Just because she needed a few essential thing in order to live

Iím still waiting for my day to come
Although I could take my life right now
I donít want to be Selfish, Greedy, and Arrogant
And get what I want when I want it.




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King Lucifer


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The following comments are for "Alone At Night"
by King Lucifer

Alone At Night
I cant see that it would be most peoples inner reaction.. to want to die yet refuse to commit suicide because they see the act as.. equal to the evil that caused the loss.. but I can see how a few could maybe look at it this way..

I dont see this piece as completely realistic but it still provoked emotion in me.. and it's a good issue to work with.. I suppose its more applicable to Americans.

I would say this piece deserves a better title.

( Posted by: A. Cain [Member] On: March 5, 2004 )





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