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don't look at me don't reach out
with your glazed and jaundiced eyes
i can see you're dead inside too

i wanted to be bones too
white washed until there's nothing but ash
grow until i'm so big i disappear

we weren't imaginary and weak
we weren't the dust of dreams
when we succumb we are strong.

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two wrongs don't make a right, but four lefts can make a square.


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The following comments are for "you're dead inside too"
by agent-x

Bones
Agent-x;

This is a nice poem. But it would be better if you could Capitalize your I's.
enjoyed the read though.

Blessings,


{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: March 5, 2004 )

really really good
very powerful and it charges along with a head of steam, the ending is really cool, I'm not sure I get it but I still went "Yeah!" which is even better:)

( Posted by: Joe Quinn [Member] On: March 5, 2004 )

Great!
This poem is great! I salute you. It really is quite moving. Most of us have reached this point in our lives.

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: April 5, 2004 )





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