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As I came in from sea,
A black flag waved high.
The reason for this I knew was because
My father probably died.
As the cancer ate his body,
It also killed his soul,
His livelihood and happiness,
Is what the heavens hath stole.
I beseeched to the sky,
Why must it always rain on my parade?
For everyone else the clouds parted,
And the turbulence seemed to fade.
My concern is will it always be hard,
Will i ever get a break?
Grandma, Grandpa, and my father,
Did you really have to take?
But through it all, to you I call,
To help me save my place;
In heaven you see, I want to be,
ButI've fallen too far from grace.

------
Leton Hall


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by LexiconDon

black flag
that made me see a part that had been in me, I had ran from the grace of God so long... many troubles I had in life and many I had troubled, even God. I tryed to pretend I was over it and Not angry but he made me see the real me. I didnt understand death there for didnt comprehend life and didnt appreciate it even in me. I had a baby to die,I was ate up with anger. I have had many to pass on but I didnt understand Love or loving .and forgiving. when I for gave others I was for given when I asked for it and the added treasure was the pain that had withered my soul was gone..Those I loved had just gone home.He showed me I was the biggest sinner of all and that I was to be taken out if I didnt change my thoughts and ways, although I drew up at first in fear.. He later showed me a love I cant compare,and gave me a quick in my heart that I thought was dead.Christ was the true doctor handling my code Blue.
you're an inspiration thank You

( Posted by: CoCo [Member] On: March 4, 2004 )

Thank u
I'm happy to see that what i wrote from my heart touched u coco and I'm sorry for the hardships you went through in your life but as you already know God is the key to everything. Keep your head up towards the heavens and u can never go wrong.

( Posted by: LexiconDon [Member] On: March 4, 2004 )

dude........
We were discussing in Workshop of how some poets write what is called "snapshot poetry" (I'm not sure if the teacher made that phrase up or not). It is when a poem describe a single moment, like a portrait or a picture. I get a bit of that feeling from this poem. And the grim mood (father probably died, cancer ate his soul, [the questioning of His ways]), aided that portrait very well. I lost a little bit of the energy of the poem towards the ending though. The last line seems to be a reflection on the narrator's self rather than his feelings towards his father's death, or God. Good poem.

( Posted by: Trunks [Member] On: March 18, 2004 )





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