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I'm brandished, battered and broken,
But to you this is of no concern.
Your loving words never spoken
Because your loving heart you burned.

The anger from below has surfaced,
As the love sinks to the depths.
Wrath from me will serve a purpose,
In the end there will be nothing left.

Priorites found and interest lost,
This part of life is always unfair.
Some people live not thinking the cost
Of entering the demon's lair.

I know I am banished from your world,
Left to walk this earth a nomadic soul.
If the feelings within you want to burrow, I will dig you the deepest hole

The wrath of the banished will be made, only if it is something you want to send.
My heart, my existence is now decayed,
I hate that I still love you in the end.

------
Leton Hall


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The following comments are for "Wrath of the Banished"
by LexiconDon

Two lines
The last line in the 4th stanza is supposed to be two lines, not one. I dont know why it came out like that but my bad :)

( Posted by: LexiconDon [Member] On: February 29, 2004 )

Your first line
says it all and sets the stage for the rest of your poem. I liked this very much. Great wording and rhyming. It flowed well. Good job.

( Posted by: amethyst [Member] On: February 29, 2004 )

ur poem
well i like ur poem and thanx for ur suppose of mine

( Posted by: OrdinaryBxGirl [Member] On: February 29, 2004 )





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