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I saw you
get in the car
sunlight on metal
heaven's hair

I saw your face
through the glass
smile like a photograph
your eyes said "take me"

I saw you
get in the car wreck
sunlight on metal
heaven's hair

I saw your face
through the glass
frozen like a photograph
your eyes said "take me"

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I'm very ape and very nice


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The following comments are for "coma/new car smell"
by Joe Quinn

exhale.

i think this may be my favourite of what i've read of yours so far, joe. cuts to the bone, cuts quick to the bone. cuts to the quick. doesn't fuck around. the world needs more poems that don't fuck around.

it reminds me of a movie. i think it's called crash. you know it?

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: February 29, 2004 )

yikes
Wow. I agree with ark. Straight to the point. The imagery was well done and in so few words! Fantastic.

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: March 1, 2004 )

humm
it reminds me of the big green apple in the little room, (I cant remember who painted it) it's enjoyably freaky, I like it.

( Posted by: Gami [Member] On: June 15, 2004 )





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