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I am lying below an endless body of night
Arms behind my head, staring at the lights
The twinkling little jewels, the sparkling little stars
Enticing me with tap dances, from a velvet stage afar

The earth below me warm, the woods alive in songs
from crickets, chicadeas and frogs, hidden in leafy throngs
And I am just a shell, hidden in dew kissed grass
For up above I travel, through a cosmic dream so vast

And in my mind I'm flying, through milky galaxies above
My thoughts are free from worries, my spirit soars like a dove
For now I am like Conrad, a cosmic traveler alone
Soaring above the earth, my destination unknown



[an]Conrad Aiken is an author buried in Savannah's most famous cemetary. His tombstone is engraved "Cosmic Mariner - Destination Unknown - Give my love to the world."[\an]


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All that we see or seem, is but a dream within a dream....
Edgar Allen Poe


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The following comments are for "Cosmic Traveler"
by poesandpoetry

it's snowing here but
This poem made me feel like it's spring already! Bravo for the interesting poem on an often-covered subject. There was one line...the second in the third stanza, that sounded a bit wordy. Other than that, great job with the phrasing and imagery. I loved this. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: February 29, 2004 )

Easy to like
This is a very nice and easy read. Makes you want to go outside and do some stargazing on your own. I particularly liked the "velvet stage" and the "cosmic dream". Well done.

( Posted by: amethyst [Member] On: March 1, 2004 )

take flight
Fantasy-inspired poem? Well, it shows in the "flight of words" you used. The whole poem soars, but I need something to mesmerize me even if one flies, in the imaginative sense of the word, a wonder to personally experience, to be exact. How does flying feel like? It's beyond the senses to describe it. To be with your clichéd "sparkling little stars," "the milky galaxies above," even if you are feet are firmed on "dew kissed grass" lacks glow.

Poetry, however, should transcend beyond the common word. Poems like this should carry more magic. I'd like to see more of your wizardry next time.

( Posted by: Idomis [Member] On: March 1, 2004 )





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