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i'm not content with what is
before my eyes
for all of that captures not a gist
it's cryin' out "beauty is a lie"

would you let me gesture in mute
this stupefied indifference in a nauseating spin
left out an "i", salvaging the dreams she built
don't you love to fly, get tossed in the wind

forgive me i didn't mean to
kill you there and then without
watching where the blows land
did you say "who?"
i feel the ghouls marching
what a rotten scene they send

twist yank yeah break that limb
you fix yourself up like my pompous dad
downing his "cookies & cream"
what a fantasy an delusion a dream
don't buy your spirit then wane away in a clink.






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