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You can see him running
as fast as his legs can propel him
across the flowing terrain.
The silent shadow chases beside him,
never faltering,
never ahead,
always parallel.
For years and years he runs endlessly,
never stopping,
though his body is bruised and exhausted.
But when he approaches the finish line,
he stops and turns to the shadow.

All my life, he says,
I tried to outrun you.
But now its too late-and I never saw
the meadows through which I ran.

We never die-
we are only born twice.


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Someday, I'll write a story about dodgeball and they'll make it into a movie.


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The following comments are for "The Shadow"
by Saratin

Perfection Unshadowed
This is perfect, Saratin. I enjoyed it immensely.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: February 29, 2004 )

The Shadow
saratin, well there's a few left for me to point out here: to tell you about the best phrases I see, as the whole of the poem is perfect.

the flowing terrain - very nice! because the speaker was running
the shadow never ahead, always parallel - oh, how I love this one, showing us what you are trying to outrun is impossible to
we never die, we are only born twice - purrfect! a very powerful ending for this wonderful piece.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: July 27, 2004 )

I must say..
great title and the last two lines are probably the most powerful for me that made it end on a great note.

( Posted by: ryangilr0y [Member] On: March 29, 2005 )





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