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Darkness surounded me as I steped outside. For a moment I thought I was about to lose it again. Oh, yeah. My name is Jordan. I lose my head sometimes and I dont remember anything, but I do know that I see a different place. Like from someone else's point of view. This all started happening when my dad got me some strang drink at the store. I dont know why he got me this, but it drove me insane. Now I cant think without listening to a haunting song deep in my mind.

As I begin to hear the song, I dont listen. I stop thinking and ignore it. I close my eyes and see my sister, in a car that's headed for the sea. Then I know. The images are the future or something like that. I decide to take a walk, then I take out my cell phone. I'm calling my friend, Jose. He should know what to do.

"Hello?"

"It's Jordan."

"What do you want?"

"Get down to Friendship Park, now."

"Ok, bye."

Click.
I close my phone and head to Friendship Park. When I get there, I see my friend. I walk over and tell him what happened. All he siad was to go to London and find a guy named Smith.On the plane I sit, relax, and fall asleep. Then I have a dream. I see Jose talking to my father and giving him something. I awake.

The next day I find Smith. We go to a nearby cafe. I tell him what happened.

"Your father gave you the Physco."

"Whats that?"

"It's powerful drink that makes the drinker see the future."

"Ahhh crap!"

"What."

"Nothing, just nothing."

When I get back to my hotel I see that the place is torn apart. I find a clue that helps. On the peice of paper it says:

ITALY

I pack my bags get my tickets and go. I fall asleep and see the most worst thing that can happen.

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Welcoming To My World...



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The following comments are for "Physco #1"
by kickflip

Uhhh....
I was seriously considering a one for this - if even. I found no direction in that story - just a line of sudden actions that confused me more and more. I'm trying to be nice about this... But I truly have to say this story[or rather the beginning of the story] is bad.

( Posted by: Tyrant Monkey [Member] On: December 28, 2001 )





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